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Nowadays,education is one of the serious problems in society.Most of education is examination-oriented.Students have to learn all the time to get high scores which are given great pressure by schools and parents。As a result,many people claim that education should be exchanged to quality-oriented.Only it altered can students be released.

什么意思。。。

这是作文么？

这是什么呢？

Nowadays,education is one of the serious problems in society.Most of education is examination-oriented.Students have to learn all the time to get high scores which are given great pressure by schools and parents。As a result,many people claim that education should be exchanged to quality-oriented.Only it altered can students be released.

这应该是楼主自己写的吧，中国风，很浓厚啊。
Students have to learn all the time to get high scores which are given great pressure by schools and parents
这一句，用的不是很好，觉得有点蹩脚。后面的修饰成分要提到前面才符合大众英语，可以改成the students who are under great pressure which given by their schools and parents have to learn all the time to get high scores
别的还可以吧，我也看不出来了，我改的也不一定对，楼主参考。

多谢指教啦

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