1. 适当用被动替换主动，这样能更客观地反映事实。句子开头不要总是用we / I (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention shouldbe paid to. ) 举个经典结尾的例子：It is ,therefore, high timethat some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry likethat. By doing so，its competitive edge will besharpened effectively.
2. 善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作为插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。如however / therefore/for example/I believe 做插入语放在中间，一般放在动词、助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。举例如下： Other individuals, however, take the attitude that …
I never forget the exceedinglythrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, whichexerted a tremendous fascination on me so that I indulged myself in googling anarmy of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classicmusic. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly 替换 very;(个人认为替换成overwhelmingly更出彩)
thrilling 替换 exciting;
sth. exerts a tremendous fascination onsb 替换 sb.be interested in sth;
google 替换 search;
an army of 替换 a lot of。
The dawn of the new century witnessedthe increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement ofscience and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashionare appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have beensubmerged by them, in large measure!
The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情;
Increasingpopularity 替换 more and morepopular;
Coincidentwith … 非常地道的句型，表达“与…一致”的意思，替换 With …;
Advancement 替换 development;
Pour into (flood into / swarm into )替换 enter into;
Current (currently )替换 now;
Appeal to sb. 替换 sb. be interested in sth.;
Growingindividuals 替换 more and morepeople;
It is noexaggeration to say 经典句型， 说某事是毫不夸张的。 (itgoes without exaggeration that更好)
For a start, we can, freely, searchdesired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will bewell enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we canget huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
For a start 替换 To begin with;
We can,freely, search 用了插入语的写作手法;
our knowledge will be well enriched,and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被动;
Additionally 替换 In addition / Besides;
Deliver 替换 send。
There is no denying that , however,computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especiallythe growing violence ,***, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen ,which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
There is no denying that , however,computers can function in the disservice of human beings, 这个句子有三个精彩之处，首先There isno denying that这个句型;其次however作为插入语;再次，function in the disservice of 替换 do harm to。
Emerging 替换 appearing ( fading 替换 disappearing );
Net citizen 网民，属于精彩用词。(直接用 netizen更好)
As a classic proverb goes that nogarden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people'lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should ,therefore, takeadvantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.