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    转载自:http://bbs.freekaoyan.com/viewthread.php?tid=156399
    大家好,文海捕鱼节目很久没有和大家见面了
    原因是没有研友愿意晒一下自己写的作文,嘻嘻~
    但是现在我们的水源来也~

    以下是一位朋友发给海豚的自己写的作文,请大家帮帮他,修改修改小毛病,或者提出大改的建议,好不好?
    至于文章的作者,海豚是要保密的欢迎各位拿自己写的作文,私下发给海豚,让大家给修改修改~

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    写的是关于一幅漫画:描写中国教育的.
    As is vividly illustrated in the cartoon above,the parents are blaming their child,who falled an exam and made a bad score of 40 points.The father says that the quality of his son is like a worker's.Moreover,the mother criticizes his boy that he is to the score.Hearing the parents's comments,the boy has his heart in his boots.

    The purpose of this cartoon is to show us that due attention has to be paid to the current education in the family.Owing to the general standard of success for a student is good score,some children whose socre of examination are bad have been discouraged.If we let this situation go as it is,we do not know what our education will be in the future.By that time,our young students will suffer a great hurt.

    Therefore,it is imperative for us to take effectvie measures.For one thing,we should appeal to the parents to do their best to encourage their children,instead of condemning their children.For another,we should rectify the bias of people for education and occupations.Also I believe that we can overcome this difficulty,and our education will have a brighter future.

    好了,大家来修改吧,记得改动的地方要用红色的字体来标记哦~
    奖励大大的有~



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    发表于 2007-7-30 11:49  资料  短消息  加为好友 
    As is vividly illustrated in the cartoon above,the parents are blaming their child,who failed in an exam and got a bad score of 40 points.The father says that the quality of his son is like a worker's.Moreover,the mother criticizes his boy that he is to the score.Hearing the parents's comments,the boy has his heart in his boots.

    The purpose of this cartoon is to show us that due attention has to be paid to the current education in the family.Owing to the general standard of success of a student is a good score,the children whose socre of examination is bad were discouraged.If we let this situation go as it is,we do not know what our education will be in the future.By that time,our younger students will suffer a lot.

    Therefore,it is imperative for us to take effective measures.For one thing,we should appeal the parents to do their best to encourage their children,instead of condemning their children.For another,we should rectify the bias of people about education and occupations.Also I believe that we can overcome this difficulty,and our education will have a brighter future.
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    发表于 2007-7-31 11:30  资料  短消息  加为好友 
    As is vividly illustrated in the cartoon above,the parents are blaming their child,who falled an exam and made a bad score of 40 points.The father says that the quality of his son is like a worker's.Moreover,the mother criticizes the boy that he is to the score(这一句不知道作者想表达什么意思?).Hearing parents' comments,the boy has his heart in his boots.

    The purpose of this cartoon is to show us that duing attention has to be paid to the current education in the family.Owing to the general standard of success for student is good score,some children whose socres(这里是说多个人的分数,不知道要不要复数啊?) of examination are bad have been discouraged. If we let this situation going on as it is(let go 是放手,放开,放松的意思),we do not know what our education will be in the future.By that time,our young students will suffer a great hurt.

    Therefore,it is imperative for us to take effectvie measures.For one thing,we should appeal to the parents to do their best to encourage their children,instead of condemning them(前面已经说了children了,这里再写一遍就累赘了).For another,we should rectify the bias of people of education and occupations.Also I believe that we can overcome this difficulty,and our education will have a brighter future.

    改得不好大家见谅
    但是感觉这篇作文是用模板写的……不知道是不是啊?



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