[研英真经研习小组][2005][大作文]

请大家在做完2005真题的大作文部分以后，回帖说说自己的感受。
海豚只是节目主持人哦~大家是主导，请大家尽情发言，交流做题的经验~海豚给大家稍微做一些纠正就好了，(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……

以前的学长曾经和我们说过，一定要和你的战友，对手多多交流，这样才能够进步，不能闭门造车！
也许让你和你的对手交流，你会觉得有些舍不得说出自己的经验。可是闭关锁国，只会落后。所以我们论坛，通过互联网给大家提供这样超空间的合作与交流，你碰到你的对手的几率大大降低了哦~所以放心地和大家交流经验吧~海豚支持你们~

大致请包括以下内容：
1、您的提纲，中文的就可以，当然，如果您有时间将作文写下来的话，是最欢迎了的
2、别人的作文，您怎样看，帮助修改
3、您在文中必须使用的一些词，特定的名词或者必然会用到的动词。（比如如果是说环保的题目的话，应该会提到温室效应greenhouse effect）
4、每期写得最好的作文，将进行展览哦~
您可以使用海豚提供给您的草稿纸哦~

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一天一天得坚持下去  
  我相信我行

谢谢有点帮助

From the picture we can see an old man who was pused out by his daughter and his sons , which indicates a phenomenon significant.

In this day and age, there is no denying that the condition of our society in the aspect of reverring parents deteriorated steadily .In fact ,we should take care of our parents well rather than disregard them totally.To start with,they are so old that can not support themselves.Next,they had ever reared us and gave a life and a good situation for us to live .In addition,whether you are a president or an ordinary man, ageneral or soldier, teacher or student ,millionaire or poor,we are all children of our parents . If there has no them ,where are we?Perhaps,that\'s is the last thing you want to do when your parents is dead you are relecant to support them.

Obviously, it is high time that we did something for our parent ,including all ways .What time?at once.

From the picture we can see an old man who was pused out by his daughter and his sons , which indicates a  phenomenon significant.

忽然又想起了这句话。不知道对不对。

互相鼓励，一起加油

接受Zidance的建议，更改一下。

另外，我把whether you are a president or an ordinary man, a genral or a soldier, a teacher or a student ,a millionaire or a poor中的后面的a都省略了，不知道对不对。下面是修改后的文章：


As is indicated in the picture, the sons and the daugher all are pushing their father out ,like throwing off a football. How sad and regretful it is!

In this day and age, there is no denying that the condition of our society in the aspect of reverring parents deteriorated steadily  .In fact ,we should take care of our parents well rather than disregard them totally.To start with,they are so old that can not support themselves.Next,they had ever rear us and gave a life and a good situation for us to live .In addition,whether you are a president or an ordinary man, ageneral or soldier,  teacher or student ,millionaire or poor,we are all children of our parents . If there has no them ,where are we?Perhaps,that\'s is the last thing you want to do when your parents is dead you are relecant to support them.

Obviously, it is high time that we did something for our parent ,including all ways .What time?at once.

说得很好啊！！！

How sad and regret it is!
这里的regret应该用adj形式吧。
There is no denying that the conditon of our society in the maner of reverring parents is becoming worser and worser .
there小写，condition拼写错误，另外作为考试作文，建议还是用书面语，例如manner和worse。应该减少第一人称和第二人称的使用，特别是第二人称，尽量使用第三人称。
后面还有几处拼写错误，例如general。
we are all child of our parents 是否应该用复数。

我写的一篇，大家不要笑话啊！
As is indicated in the picture, the sons and the daugher are pushing their father out ,like throwing off a football.  How sad and regret it is!

In this day and age, There  is no denying that the conditon of  our society  in the maner of reverring parents is becoming worser and worser .In fact ,we should take care of our parents well rather than disregard them totally.To start with,they are so old that can not support themselves.Next,they had ever rear us and gave  a life and a good situation for us to live .In addition,whether you are a president or an ordinary man, a genral or a soldier, a teacher or a student ,a millionaire or a poor,we are all child of our parents . If there has no them ,where are we?Perhaps,that\'s is the last thing you want to do when your parents is dead  you are relecant to support them.

Obviously, it is high time that we did something for our parent ,including all ways .What time?at once.

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