【经典范文】
The above pie chart clearly and precisely reveals the most urgent and unsolved social problems concerned by cyber citizens: education problems, Three Rural Issues, the supervision of public servants, the social security and environmental protection etc. Among them, the most striking one is the education problem, which takes up 23%.
Why do cyber citizens attach much importance to education problems? Two main reasons may account for that. One essential factor is that many current education problems cause a strong concern, such as the random expansion of university enrollment, irregular education fees, and the inequality of teaching resources. Another factor that draws more of people’s attention is the low employment rate of college students. Today a wealth of students can not find proper jobs after graduation, therefore people begin to rethink our higher education.
As a consequence, it is urgent for us to take effective actions. One of the solutions to the above problem is that our government should formulate related policies in the light of practical problems. The problems confronting us can’t be solved without the government’s strategy adjustment. Besides, for common people, we should respond to and implement the government’s policies positively. Only in this way can a beatific and harmonious society be built.
【范文精译】
上面这张饼形图清晰而又准确地揭示了网民最关注的、亟需解决的社会问题:教育问题、三农问题、公职人员监督问题、社会保障以及环境保护等问题。在这些问题当中,最突出的是教育问题,占到所有社会问题的23%。
为什么网民如此关注教育问题呢?以下两个原因或许可以解释。一个重要因素是,当前教育中出现的种种问题引起了大众的强烈关注。譬如,大学的随意扩招、乱收费以及教育资源的不平衡。毕业生的低就业率是人们关注教育问题的另一个主要因素。现在很多毕业生找不到合适的工作,所以人们开始重新考虑我们的高等教育。
因此,我们迫切需要采取一些有效的措施。其中一个好的解决方法是,政府应该基于实际问题制定相关政策,如果没有政府的战略调整,我们所面临的问题就不可能得到解决。此外,对于普通民众,我们应该积极响应并实施政府的政策。只有这样,才能建成幸福和谐的社会。
【高分解析】
1.句中the most urgent and unsolved social problems concerned by sb.的意思是“某人最关注的、亟需解决的社会问题”,后面的Three Rural Issues意为“三农问题”。
2.作者利用问句的形式来启发读者思考,其中attach much importance to表示“关注……,十分重视……”,其同义短语还有pay much attention to等。
3.句中a wealth of用的很好,一改往日a lot of, lots of等词,其同义的短语还有a great deal of, plenty of等。在一篇文章中,考生可选用不同的词汇来表达同一个意思,以避免重复。
4.our government should formulate related policies in the light of…表示“政府应根据……制定相关政策”,此句常在末段使用,可提出建议措施,其中in the light of意为“根据,按照”。
5.Only in this way, can…此句为倒装句,通常作为文章的结尾句,考生在写作过程中应采用多种表达方式,为作文添彩。